Rough Cut Feedback

• Holding a shot steady, where appropriate; Proficient
• Framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate; Basic to proficient
• Using a variety of shot distances as appropriate; Basic
• Shooting material appropriate to the task set; Proficient
• Selecting mise-en-scéne, including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting; Basic to proficient
• Editing so that the meaning is apparent to the viewer; Proficient
• Using varied shot transitions and other effects selectively and appropriately for the task set; Basic to proficient
• Using sound with images and editing appropriately for the task set; Proficient
• Using titles appropriately; Proficient

1. Good use of non-diegetic sound at the start (see 5)
2. Have folio of camera flashing at same time as pictures
3. Interpret pan/envelope tool into pictures so they have a 3D effect
4. Change transitions of pictures from wipe/crossface to camera-like flash
5. Eliminate some of the pictures at the start.. 36 secs is too much
6. Why are the photos blurry? Make them clear, not distorted.
7. Lower volume of non-diegetic ‘creepy’ music at start
8. 37-1.19 — This is too much time getting ready, 1/4 it.
9. Transitions are interesting, but why are they used? They must have a purpose.
10. 17-119 – Vary shot types. Must be done.
11. 39- music, no music (Jay Z) –> Too abrupt. Eliminate.  There is also a lack of continuity with other cuts.
12. 129 — Door handle, feet?  Different shots needed.
13. Trim area in stairs – continuity –> look where the characters are at.
14. 134 — How do the audience know it’s a change of day?  151– Visually, how can this be shown? Think about flashes (camera)
15. 156 — really good.
16. Trim from 134 – 156 –> get to 156 sooner.
17. Good use of non-diegetic music at 156 — but why not use the same music from the start?
18. 151 –> why heartbeat?
19. 151-2.17 –> Varied shot types needed — feet getting up, faces, etc.
20. 224 –> why transition used?
21. 2.24 – -> the non diegetic sound stops too abruptly,.  Once again why heartbeat?
22. 2.42 –> Good white out turning into flashback with Ouija Board
23. 2.42 –>Continuity? The characters are in different positions.  3.13 –> Eliminate some – needs to be trimmed.
24. Good use of non-diegetic sound ‘No’ and close up –> 3.13
25. 3.18 –> Why is this transition used?
26. 3.30 –> Get rid of zoom out/edit down.
27. 3.35 –> close up of bag/hand needed.  Close up of Ouija board needed.  Anna’s POV needed.
28. 4.08 –> Faith’s character, must edit down – interpret a different angle.
29. 4.09 –> Good white out to introduce flashback.
30. 4.20 –> close up’s needed
31. 4.26 –> use the screaming in the background with a black screen
32. 4.28 – 4.30 –> too blurry for too long
33. 4.30 – 4.38 –> too much POV – close up’s needed of other characters.
34. What comes at the end?   Have the protagonists face with shock

Overall

Good; Use of non-diegetic sound

Target; Vary shot types and trim areas needed.

33/60

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